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Is this a good thesis statement?

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June 26, 2019 / By Cimone
Question: I am supposed to construct a thesis statement about my research paper. This is my topic: The topic of this research paper will analyze the significance of the Battle of the Bulge for the Allied Armies, in addition to discussing the effects the crucial battle had on the German Army's downfall toward the end of the European conflicts in World War II. Is this thesis statement good?- The Battle of the Bulge was a German assault that backfired and lead to the Germans losing critical aspects of their forces. The Allied forces then were able to advance, as a result, and within months the Germans surrendered. Thank you sir you are a gentleman and a scholar! what about this- The Battle of the Bulge was a German assault that backfired and lead to the Germans losing critical aspects of their forces, allowing the Allied Forces to advance and cause the Germans to surrender.
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Bab Bab | 4 days ago
I think its a pretty good thesis statement since its argumentative and catchy but you might want to consider condensing it a bit. For instance, cut out the last line because I think the first one is more significant. By the way, its GREAT!
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Bab Originally Answered: Is this a good thesis statement regarding social security?
This is one position towards Social Security, one I hear often. I don't agree with it, in fact I think most people don't. But it's a valid position to take, if you can make a case for it. The thesis is consistent and well stated, so I would say it's a good one. The question will be to see how well you can support it.
Bab Originally Answered: Is this a good thesis statement regarding social security?
Its got many good points, but one very negative aspect. as you are putting much of this information in your thesis, you will have less to support it with. i suggest you make a more broad generalization over the key points you will be discussing. though if you feel that this is a sufficient thesis, then you can keep it this way, but i personally believe that you should cut down on the number of sentences used in a thesis to only 2 maybe even 3

Abra Abra
One sentence is all you need. The thesis should be something you can prove. If you want to include information on the allied forces combine the two sentences into one. Also you talk about things happening in order of time. Ok for the body of paper but not necessary for thesis.
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Sybald Sybald
that is a great thesis statement that I wish i had done when i wrote a report on the battle of bulge
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Sybald Originally Answered: Thesis statement- Is my thesis too long?
You have three un-punctuated asides in your thesis. I suggest maybe the following: +++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++ Garrison Keillor has proved to readers, listeners, and even his critics that mid-western life can be an interesting topic to people who had never before thought twice about this unique region in the U.S by the way he uses different **???** techniques to captivate various readers from all over the world. +++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++ The **???** needs either an adjective or your own intended meaning which I feel you had omitted due to your concern over the wordiness of your thesis statement's sentence. Lastly, here is what I removed, but they are great ideas to use and go on about writing the body and or conclusion for your essay. -- concern --who prefer other genres -- Hope this helps.

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